The way she
Warps truth, forges
Scars in nimble hearts
With faithless innuendo
Under her portentous spell
I have worn both the shame of scandal
And the virtue of posthumous savior
Any madness intrinsic in my psyche
She has heightened to such a degree
As to leave me fiercely deranged
Even death would disavow
One such as I’ve become
A stray scavenging
Search of a
This is my first ever attempt at an Etheree I got the idea from the supremely talented (if you want to see how it is really done check them out!)
B.G. Bowers and Melanie Blackwell
This submission is for
46 thoughts on “Stray”
Fantastic – love is cruel indeed, perfectly captured! 🙂 🙂
Awww thanks Helen =)
Beautifully written (of course) and love the movement.
Thank you Anja =)
Very well expressed. I liked seeing what you did with the etheree form.
Thanks Mary, it is a great form =)
Lovely M – worthy of many a read.
Thanks Anna =)
Very well written & I like the “moderates intellect”…..how true!
Thanks so much hehe I am glad you caught that!
i read it a few times…really nice…its no secret that we live in a world of warped truths but I think we even sometimes need wounds to make ourselves more resilient to situations…over a period of time the wounds heal…the scars remain as a reminder to the odd times…the best part is when you realize that you had weathered the storm all by yourself and came out as a winner…that when even ‘scars’ are pretty satisfactory 🙂
Thank you for your thoughtful response wow. I agree with whole-heartedly though there have been moments I have felt and behaved irrationally certainly, clarity tends to come in retrospect
Wonderful expression of love, which so often is cruel etc. Beautiful from first line to last!
Thank you so very much Lisa =)
So lovely 🙂 and thank you for the shout out however it was my first attempt at that form as well and you have no need to be so modest. Your talent is amazing and inspiring.
Awwww thanks Melanie you are an inspiration to me as well =)
You are way too modest! I just commented on your poem “Voice”, telling you how amazing you are.:) But, thank you so much for the mention 🙂
That was also my first attempt at an Etheree. I think it’s a fabulous style that lends itself to any theme, mood, emotion or experience.
I think you did a shining job! Particularly loved these lines:
“Warps truth, forges
Scars in nimble hearts
With faithless innuendo”
Thank you so much! That means a lot to me I really liked the form =)
love will def leave you all jacked up….
def full of your usual emotion
you worked the form well
sorry i am late today work was brutal…ha..
Thank you so much Brian, I really liked the form. I like working with syllables but I am not much for rhyming
Search of a
The past can be a foreign land; nostalgia, as you say, but a dream.
Great as allows and I am always impressed by how you can use different forms of prose/poetry so skillfully.
Thank you so much =) I can’t use rhyming forms or meter though lol
There are times that I have a way
Of rhyming the sentences that I say
I’m not the best at more that aa, bb when I write,
Advanced rhyming schemes make me feel not too bright.
I once was a good limerick bard
But now I find it rather hard.
Free verse means that I don’t have to find
The elusive word that rhymes with orange.
hehe this is fantastic =)
I have never tried something like that. It seems as if you should get an A+..well that ‘s my grade..enjoyed it.
Awww thanks Grizz =) It was really fun actually so please do try it
Never let go of a dream. The ones from the past are the ones most likely to come true. Nicely done.
Thanks so much Suzy =)
You aced the form brilliantly. I havent tried one yet, but they intrigue me. I went over to read the etheree collab you gave the link for and am sure glad I did. Brilliant writing going on over there!
You should try Sherry =) Thanks so much and they are brilliant!
Came here from poets united and I really enjoyed the imagery of your work. I am a fan!
Thanks so much I really appreciate that!
Oops hit send accidentally. I am intrigued by this etheree form of writing and am going to try my hand at it too. Thanks for the inspiration. 🙂
Awww thank you for your kind words and please do send me a link when you’ve written yours I would love to see it =)
I have enjoyed in the past playing with the etheree – an interesting form. I do hope your poem is not too autobiographical!
It’s fictional or at least not current. Thank you so much =)
Love is never cruel. People just love calling it names, and that’s how people are. This is an interesting write.
Wow. It’s amazing how effortless you play words to the page. I love this poem, it reminds me all at once of the great love I had and it’s terrible end. Thank you. 🙂
Thank you so much I love words to the point of obsession haha I am sorry about the terrible end hope all is well now
I’m a huge word nut myself. I’m amazed by how much power and grace can be gained from different arrangements of the same 26 letters.
Everything is great now. Her and I make better friends than husband and wife. 🙂
It amazes me as well. The power of words to stir the mind and heart it is just fantastic. I am glad you are friends and all is well.