Wordle #231 “The Fish in the System”

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He loved her and it was enough

though society devised many methods

to prove to him otherwise.

His world was yellow and brown

sometimes he looked over the fence

at the teeming pits of AstroTurf beyond

and thought a little green would be nice.

Years passed like a sentence,

next took precedence over now.

And my god how he waited

trying to connect, to tell the tales

chilling steadily within him

but never speaking, dealing

only in salts and butterscotch.

Night applies itself

to such sinister ends

when first we tame

ourselves to pretend.

The day that he joined “them”

was the last day that he lived

and even she grew distant

though she neither left

nor stopped loving him.

still trying to get my rhythm and schedule down

 

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9 responses to “Wordle #231 “The Fish in the System”

  1. This is excellent and very clearly written. If you worry about your poetry submissions being too abstract for publication, I would try submitting this one. There’s no one on the planet who couldn’t easily understand what you’re saying. And it’s so very relatable.

    • Thank you so much =) Picking poems to submit is always the tough bit and most magazines don’t want work previously published on a blog so I don’t have an audience to kind of help me figure it out

  2. trying to connect, to tell the tales
    chilling steadily within him
    but never speaking, dealing
    only in salts and butterscotch.

    Wow! Love this image – painted so incredibly well in colour and taste!

    A poetic prosaic (not in the wordy sense) or perhaps, as I like to suggest – prosetry – but not quite because this reads more poem than prose – but whatever we “name” it – great piece of story telling Yves 🙂

    And …. take your time to find what works for you 🙂

  3. Pingback: Oh, Richard, how could you? | scottishmomus·

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