B&P’s Shadorma & Beyond – Free Verse

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Sabin Balasa. Freedom in the Aquarium, n.d. WikiArt

Freedom is a muse

Diabolically preening

Her multitudinous veils.

I sit sullen by the water’s laughing edge

Wringing my heart

As if it were a bundle of wet hair,

Each drop an echoing tome.

There is very little

An opinion can inform.

I am so much more and so often less.

The only freedom

Left a man after the streets

Have been laid is his curiosity

And I’ve a mind for misdirection.

I kind of cheated on this because I decided to have 2 stanzas but they can be seen individually

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8 responses to “B&P’s Shadorma & Beyond – Free Verse

  1. Ha. keep that mind of misdirection and feed that curiosity. color outside the lines and make your own roads.

    some wonderful images in this. from the laughing water to ringing the hair. A finely layered well written piece

  2. Separately or together – these are absolutely wonderfully stunning!

    What powerful evocation – I love the imagery that births itself as I read this – I see the scenes unfolding before my eyes … which speaks to the power of the words carefully chosen and the form they follow …

    I sit sullen by the water’s laughing edge
    Wringing my heart
    As if it were a bundle of wet hair,
    Each drop an echoing tome.

    Knocked it right out of the park!

    The only freedom
    Left a man after the streets
    Have been laid is his curiosity
    And I’ve a mind for misdirection.

    Brilliant! I can see this cobbled street or some such, on a grey wet day, everything dripping and cool – with a dark haired man in blurred focus – as a tall woman stands near a street corner – looking at signs – hesitant – ….

    I swear – you have captured my imagination in full flight with this piece Yves!

    So well done!

    Cheers
    Pat

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