The storm in my heart
Dissolves in yours.
How precious these words
Haunting our borders
Lifeless after impact.
The price was too high
My need too intermittent
To justify the litter
Of your exclusion.
Like your smile.
Remote beneath my own
To conscious delusion
We can still belong
Behind the scenes
Our masks freeze
Into place and I wonder
What it would feel like
To become you
In the absence of self
We might succeed
One unholy entity
Purified by the pools
Your impassive eyes.
The subject matter is different but this is what came to me when listening to the song
15 thoughts on “Music Prompt #1 “Saint Lawrence River” and Wordle #143”
Wow wow wow–I’m otherwise speechless!
Awww thank you =)
You are too kind!
I think this is an excellent response and reaction to the inspiring prompt.
the whole point is to inspire – and be inspired – and so you did.
And I think there is a correlation and connection to the music and lyrics – it has been fashioned and created in your own words – poetess of “pain” – and I don’t mean that in a mean or cruel way. You know that you have a way of evoking and teasing images from words that affect on many levels – and we often draw inspirations from heaviness and ache – pain, longing, lost love, destruction.
And this isn’t necessarily a bad thing. And I’m going to stop justifying my comment now.
I really felt drawn into the imagery – it’s simple yet so moving – touching – and it is beautiful – the longing like a frost etching on a cold window pane.
Beautiful Yves 😀
Your comment is beautiful and makes me all warm and squishy =) Thank you so much! I don’t even know what to say or do with myself thank you a million times
Your response was so poignant and you have such a beautiful lyrical quality to your poetry that absolutely sucks me in. I didn’t see a way of leaving a comment am I blind or did you switch it off
thanks Yves – always a good thing – to feel warm and squishy – if it’s a good thing – which is was meant to be 😀
Thank you for the generous comment about my response. No – you’re not dreaming – I purposely turned the comments off for the piece – it’s so raw and personal to me – has haunted me for well almost 30 years – so, I just thought “nope” – I don’t want to explain. the words should be enough.
But I do thank you for your kindness and generosity in your comment 🙂
I understand completely. I sometimes spend hours on a post and never publish because I realize I am not ready yet
This is really cool:
“My need too intermittent
To justify the litter
Of your exclusion.”
I really like the double meaning in “become” here:
“What it would feel like
To become you”
Thank you so much for your lovely words!
Beautiful writing. I Love your ending on this. I have often thought of what it would be like to be a certain person in my life, and the thought
Thank you Sara, it can be a very scary thought indeed