The moon spars under a black tarp,
An abrasion of silver glinting
Like the chords of a severed chrysalis.
Who unzips you, fictitious sister?
Who exsanguinates your ripe heart
That each month you retreat
Behind a famished smile?
Is it either the favored sun
Or the red-faced warlord
Opposed by your sovereign?
I wrote several little poems yesterday on the bus. I will be pretty distracted the next two weeks. My national exam is coming up and well I have a lot going on at the moment.
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This was stunning Yves! All the best for your exams 🙂
Thank you very much XD
Oh, this is so tantalizing–love it! Prayers & best wishes for your exams.
Thank you so much for everything!
You’re most welcome.
Wow! Stunning write! All the very best for your exams…..
Thank you for your kindness Sue!
I’ll never look at the moon in the same light again. Lots of Luck 🙂
You’re welcome Yves. Oh, going by your photo I saw your doppleganger today.
Really? I am an odd bird I am surprised you found another. You didn’t happen to get a photo did you lol
Really. No I didn’t get a shot, I was driving. it was a dead ringer of you.
That’s crazy Laurie! I wish I could have seen her too
Good luck with your exams and whatever else is going on. Your poem is very beautiful.
Awww thank you XD
Amazing poetry! I do wish you luck with the exam preparation and exam itself!
Thank you so much on all accounts!
Who unzips you — what a great line, I like the visual of it. The moon as an abrasion as well, or with an abrasion – either one makes for another very interesting visual.
Good luck on your exam. I have a big one this summer as well.
What is your exam about? Best wishes to you as well. Thank you so much for your kind words!
“The moon spars”
“An abrasion of silver”
“Who unzips you, fictitious sister?”
SUCH intense, vivid, strong language here. I absolutely love this.
Awww thank you I am so glad that you do!
Wishing you all the best for your exams.
Little poems are wonderful too – and the imagery here is incredibly powerful and fascinating. Tiny gems we can hold in our pockets 😀
Awww thank you that is so sweet