Photo Challenge #30 “Crashing Cranes”

Paper Cranes

John Alunan

The space between your eyes

A hieroglyph, a presaging ghost,

The marrow disk of a lotus

A down of hairs so fine

Only a spinet could have laid them.

I cannot bare the color

Of the sea when still.

The parapets of packed sand

With their clam shell windows

That look on, white as a hospital.

Birds shatter against you

Like specimen slides

And your arms imposingly woven

Waiting for the pneumatic chalk

To settle and proclaim

One of us forfeit

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17 responses to “Photo Challenge #30 “Crashing Cranes”

  1. Your emotionally packed piece reminds me of a chess game.
    And two champions… one knowing they would rather forfeit than have the opponent actually handle their king in check mate.

    Your words are as artistically woven as the cranes in the photo!

    Thanks for your kind words (…my grands are running late…so I was able to stop by).

  2. I cannot bare the color
    Of the sea when still…cool tying the motion and stillnees to the color and feeling….the white as a hospital line is cool as well..expanding feeling….

  3. Interesting and powerful – as I sit with this piece and let it settle. As many have already mentioned – the choice of phrases – ” I cannot bare the color /Of the sea when still.” or “A down of hairs so fine /Only a spinet could have laid them.” – such amazing imagery – just wonderful Yves, leaves me feeling breathless in anticipation of the ending. 😀

  4. And I forgot to mention- the choice of the word “spinet” is interesting. And really fascinating in context.

    Had me searching out meanings for deep understanding.
    Great job Yves!

  5. “the parapets of packed sand, with their clam shell windows” is absolutely stunning imagery…brilliantly descriptive and vivid.

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