Innocence can neither
Be claimed nor extinguished
The older I get the younger
Everybody else seems
And we are all just scraping by
No matter how it appears
In our experience of envy.
Every war ever fought
Starts within a heart
So wounded that it cannot
Comprehend its own means
I think I might be
Beautiful after all
Because I have never met
In another man a mirror that
Could encompass me entirely
I don’t remember
Much after birth
It’s as if I’d died
Right there, unfinished
Wearing nothing but a shriek
And life is nothing but
A protracted declaration
Of all that we mean
But never achieve
Hesitation is the subtlest of poisons
Its occasional necessity makes
It especially hard to distinguish
I have imbibed more than most
And in every window there are
Two hand prints emblazoned
Like leaves suspended in
A perpetual state of Autumn
Your smile siphons speech
Perhaps I’ve always been mute
A shaft of lightening
Portentous and labyrinthine
Perhaps I’ve stood here
Intermittent as an exhale
Staring into the immensity
Of your salacious curvature
As lifetimes flit by unseen
I should have torn my sleeves
Left them folded on the duvet
Like a pair of decompressed wings
Anything to prevent the transmission
Of my ailing heart into your likeness
I hate the way you
Turn my tears into artillery
And if I am nothing
But a circuitous means
To an unsatisfactory end
What’s the point of pulling
Sometimes I follow
The flight of swallows
Thinking that if angels
Existed they’d also appear
Ordinary when dismissed
Every time I close my eyes
I see the blush of the universe
Undressing and everything
I need to know can be found there
In those bloody silhouettes
Who determines excess?
I’d rather my emotions be
Heightened than abridged.
There’s always someone
To edit my silences
No matter how gratuitous
The endeavor there’s always
Someone, palms twitching,
Waiting to refer my pain
To the next unsolicited suitor
And justifications always refrain
I have always been afraid
Of expectations knowing
That they are only ever
Defined when unmet
I saw this 10 poems in 20 minutes and thought what a great challenge “hint hint” I thought I’d give it a go I didn’t bother numbering them as I was typing and apparently I lost count. This was hard but fun. I didn’t have time to think or quibble with myself over vocabulary so it is all pretty much stream of conscious.
Inspiration for this challenge can be found here
If you’ll recall from my last update the upstairs bathroom is one of our primary concerns (financially speaking it has in no way discouraged us from going through with the sale) and I’ve just received an update on the situation from Sam.
The insurance company suspects that the leak may be occurring underneath the floorboards, a misaligned drain pipe or some such thing. They are planning on drilling a hole in the living room ceiling to investigate. If the problem is easily rectified they will fix it which will allow Sam and I more time to save up for the remodel. If they find that the problem is serious they will have no choice but to redo the whole bathroom.
Now the insurance company doesn’t care about aesthetics so if they redo the bathroom they will likely keep the old bathroom suite and replace the walls and floors using the cheapest available options. The home owner’s daughter figured we might not want that so she said we can buy whatever we like and the insurance company will use that instead. So we wouldn’t be doing the renovations at all just picking the decor. Since the insurance company will be paying for quite a bit that does make renovating the bathroom cheaper in the long run (not to mention neither one of us has ever actually redone a bathroom) and since we would be paying for whatever decor replacements we want the sellers have offered to lower the price of the house. We knew we’d have to redo the bathroom so it makes sense to do it this way but on the other hand remodeling a bathroom is not cheap. We were planning on saving up a little first but we’ve decided to take the offer and hope for the best! I don’t know at this stage though if the bathroom will even require an immediate remodel but it doesn’t that should give us a little more time.
The Realtor is working on the contract now with the stipulation that the bathroom still needs to be repaired by the seller.
42 thoughts on “11 Poems in 20 Minutes and House Update”
Impressive. I love the tone of the poems and the first person sense of having worked out one of life’s problems. I do this speed poetry myself but not ready to share them yet with the world.
Thank you so much Simon if you ever do post them I would love to read =)
These are nice! Please steal my ideas more often.
I hope you don’t mind when I read your post yesterday I got so excited I wanted to try it
I guess all those poems would take your mind off the bathroom. 🙂
I think I needed to unleash a little haha
Unleash may be a little too underdone there Yves. 🙂
Quite a challenge, but these poems are great – deep, personal yet accessible. Well written!
Thank you so much Chris that is so kind =)
alright….the roller coaster is about to go over the hill….smiles….no turning back….i know you will love your house…
# 8 is my fav, but 9 has an interesting feel in that last question…the point in pulling the trigger…ha…
Thanks so much Brian XD
6 & 7 for me Yves, amazing to do the challenge and succeed as you have. Good luck with the house. Doing reno’s can be fun.. Sometimes 🙂
Loved ‘wearing nothing but a shriek’ … I guess that’s exactly how we all start off–and occasionally go on 😉
I think one of the reasons I love poetry is because I am always surprised–at where people go, at how the words come together, at how perfectly it can reflect the interior of our lives–loved, loved this
Thank you so much for your beautiful comment
I like all 11 poems. Especially, “Expectations are only defined when unmet” – so true. And, “decompressed wings”.
The bathroom Reno sounds like fun. Go with the flow and enjoy it 🙂
Thank you Bianca =)
Fabulous as ever – just LOVE the last poem, the 11th, so yayay for breaking rules and writing just one more!!! 🙂 🙂
Oh, and you inspired me – had to have a go at the ten poems in twenty minutes challenge!! 🙂 🙂
Wow thank you Helen I am so glad you liked it! I didn’t intentionally break the rules apparently I can’t count mentally lol You did an AMAZING job on yours Helen
That’s amazing and very impressive work!
Thanks so much and thank you for submitting to the challenge XD
It was fun. Excuse my silliness in my post.
I like silliness =)
I am so glad. I love your poetry.
Awww thank you XD
Stream of conscious is good. While I do know some who love to edit and rework pieces – well my own opinion is that you can change the flavor too much. I had submitted a piece to an online zine and the editor made changes, I made changes, The barter back and forth of what to take out, change and leave in left me not wanting to submit to that publication again. After all the changes – I think the piece ended up on the cutting room floor so to speak. I always keep originals. I am not a fan of ulterior motives and making a poet change their view. While I am more creative than correct in grammar – I don’t mind gentle nudges and corrections. I just am not fond of complete renovations.
Speaking of which…been there done that with a bathroom. Only one in our first home was so small, the pipes so old and corroded everything had to be redone. Switching the tub onto the window wall helped to create just a tad more room when ‘sitting’.
Just got wind so to speak that our fire place chimney needs some repair – so any thoughts of current bathroom updates (just having more or less update our kitchen) – will be on hold for a bit.
Continue good luck with your new home to be.
I used to delete all the poems I was dissatisfied with but now I work through them and try to bring them to some sense of completion. The work I do edit I try to keep to fixing grammatical errors and/or clarifying awkward sentences. I try to avoid the self-effacing pruning. I haven’t tried to submit my work and that is probably a big part of it I don’t want to be marketed or to have my work be compartmentalized or something
This is such a wonderful response, rather responses, to an fun inspiration prompt (the idea that originally intrigued you) – and you’ve offered it to us too. Just brimming full of possibilities to let the mind flow and wander at will.
Clearly you are a poet of high order, (I’m not -but that’s okay) as your verses, each within the other, or standing alone, paint such incredible images. Truly fascinating and wonderful exercise.
Thank you so much for your incredibly generous compliments! I am in awe of your writing, the depth, the sophistication, absolutely stunning. I can’t tell you what an honor it is to have you participating at prompt XD
Thank you – I am flattered that my writing moves you. Certainly what anyone would consider a very wonderful compliment.
I’m enjoying participating in the prompts – not only because of the challenges they pose to me, but as I read how others respond, my world expands and I have the opportunity to learn and encourage others as well. So many ideas and inspirations, and words in all styles and forms to be sampled – it is simply amazing.
Actually, I find your words and responses very moving. I often sit with them and let them linger in my mind; it’s as if I can taste the images as they are absorbed; perhaps that sounds odd? I find your work very evocative. 🙂
Thank you so much that is a tremendous compliment and I am very moved by it. I love hosting the prompts and seeing the different perspectives it never ceases to be illuminating and I am always amazed at the creativity/talent. Every person’s response is unique and often completely unexpected.
And therein lies the beauty — perhaps one of the best things about being “connected” and finding groups like this.
And a huge thank you to you – for all your work and efforts in hosting this and providing so much content for inspirations – this is a huge job in itself – and clearly, you are very good at it – as there are a fair number who are engaged and entertained by it 🙂
My group is quite intimate. I don’t get 50 or 60 responses per prompt as some sites do but I have people who return again and again, there is a real sense of community, we comment to each other and everyone is so talented and kind. I don’t restrict on length or number of submissions, I like to offer inspiration but I don’t wish to be restrictive in the process. When I started the prompt originally on my blog I didn’t know if I would get a single response! It is a labor of love. When I move though I might have to recruit a little extra help especially since I might simultaneously be starting Swedish classes again
Well, sometimes the smaller groups are better — it can be less overwhelming and threatening, as well as leaving people more time to read and consider what others are doing. There is nothing quite like getting lost in the shuffle of prompts that end up with a huge amount of participants.
I do hope your move works out well – and if this means language classes too – well, certainly you’re hands will be full.
I’m sure if necessary, if you ask for help, you would receive offers. 🙂
I love being able to read and respond personally I think it’s important to do so but if I was getting hundreds of entries a day that would be very hard to manage on my own. I have helpers now as I don’t do all the prompts.
Loved the poems! The house is awesome!
Thank you so much!
Explicit epic poem reflection of life’s journey.l enjoyed it immensely. Jalal