Woman in paisley print skirt: What floor?
Man in flannel jacket: 666
Woman in paisley print skirt: (grim) Would you prefer 665 or 667?
Man in flannel jacket: (sighs exasperated) I’ve stated my preference.
Woman in paisley print skirt: Are you suffering from some type of intellectual deficit? A fetish? A death wish? A complex perhaps?
Man in flannel jacket: I don’t have time for your antics we’re all headed for the same place just push the damn button would ya?
Woman in paisley print skirt: (frowns, pushes button)
(Elevator doors close. Cabin mounts cries out like nails on slate.)
Woman with striped umbrella: (whines) Why hasn’t he returned my calls?
Woman in polka dot sweater: They never do. It’s entirely personal and you should take it as such. Whoever heard of post-coital amnesia anyways?
Man in flannel jacket: The Venusians are a contentious lot.
Man with messenger bag: Does she love me? Has she found someone else? Maybe I should workout. Get a job. Move out of my parent’s basement.
Man in flannel jacket: There are bats in the eaves. A wake of revulsion.
Woman with striped umbrella: His aorta holds as a latch so that nothing given can depart unblemished.
Woman in polka dot sweater: Love is only fatal when dormant.
Teen boy on phone: Archetype of Death 3 premieres on Wednesday. I’ll bring the sleeping bags. (I am so fucking lonely)
Man with messenger bag: Her smile is like a halo split and inverted.
Woman in paisley print skirt: Does she still speak to the Devil?
Man in flannel jacket: She speaks always on his behalf. Pity is a terrible mother.
Woman in polka dot sweater: (choked inhale) If only we’d never met.
Man in flannel jacket: Is that blood?
Woman in paisley print skirt: From the Apocalypse? That was last week…it’s probably just lipstick or a spot of red paint.
Woman with striped umbrella: What’s the weather like? I haven’t been outside since this morning.
Woman in polka dot sweater: It’s as cold as a serpent’s kiss and twice as venomous.
Old man: (shouting) For heaven’s sake Eleanor what time is it?
Eleanor: What’s the use of keeping score Harold? You’re already dead.
Old man: (still shouting) Is that vodka in your purse woman!?
Eleanor: (giggles) It’s vinegar to keep the flies off.
Woman with stripped umbrella: (shrugs) What’s the use he never listens.
Woman in polka dot sweater: Why don’t we go dancing? Men are always more attentive when hunting.
(Elevator stops abruptly rattles occupants like dice in a tin cup. Doors open. In the distance voices chant Zetsubou)
(I have a lot of trouble understanding what I am hearing when in a crowd so I thought I’d have a little fun with that. I also recently read a story written in complete gibberish. Anyone else want to give it a go? Post a link in the comments.)
This submission is for: Tale Weaver’s
16 thoughts on “Tale Weaver’s Prompt #14 Elevator”
A marvellous piece – you have captured that sense of confined isolation perfectly.
Thank you so much Chris!
Brilliant, so original!! 🙂
Thanks Helen I am so happy you liked it!
ha. quite surreal…and interesting…
a couple of those passengers speak rather poetically…lol…
love is only deadly when dormant…smiles…i like that..
This was a lot of fun like listening in on people’s private thoughts.
So unusual and clever, like a glimpse into everyone’s own little hell.
Thank you very much XD
Thank you XD
You did well, Candice.
Thank you Celestine =)
Lovely story, it felt a bit creepy, as in, I kept expecting even wackier answers and wondering what the next person will say.
The miss-hearing thing happens to me all the times, it is like I have trouble distinguishing speech,but on the other hand, I can hear the dog whistle like you are blowing a trumpet right next to my ear.
It was meant to be a bit creepy to suggest something more supernatural and sinister the piece it was inspired by was extremely creepy