Face down in a row
Rigid bodies crowd
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Skeletal frames identical
A child’s hand reaches down
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Grips an unsung memory
A king to pair the queen
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A father and mother lost
If not for an abiding heart
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Yeeps this was a tough one!
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Wonderful poem!
Thanks Lisa =)
wow that is allot of power in 8 lines!
Thank you so much Sam!
an unsung memory…king to pair queen….love that stanza….
Thank you so much Brian that makes me happy =)
A child’s hand reaches down — i can sense death over this part… a notion of something like an accident happened that brought forth into crowd gathering… ah, the over all piece reads sad & quite intriguing… smiles…
Thank you so much Kelvin =)
That is a thought provoking eight lines. Well Done
Thanks Alan!
You have managed a very powerful eight lines of strong imagery. Excellent. Each line made me think…
Eileen
Oh wow thank you Eileen
Very thoughtful poem, big story, history – in 8 lines!
Thank you so much Irene!
does not envoke pleasant images, but well done
Thank you Mark
There is sadness in this poem, I think. The child remembers what no longer is….but he/she remembers when it was. He / she holds them in his/her heart. Well penned; and I like your picture as well.
Thank you very much Mary, children shouldn’t have to experience such loss
Very evocative. Packs a big punch with few words. Love it. Reowr!
Thank you so much!
This is wonderful
Thanks Celestine =)
Love that line of the child’s hand gripping an unsung memory. So evocative of loss and feelings associated with it. Sad and beautiful.
Thank you so much Loredana =)
Thank heavens for memory, and that abiding heart.
Indeed =)
Fantastic – and that is my favourite ‘William Carlos William’ Poem x
It was my first time reading the poem, it is wonderful =) Thank you so much!
strong …. with a sad punch….great write….
Thank you so much!
and the pic with poem is looks so nice!
I thought the picture was quite lovely and inspiring =)
I couldn’t imagine taking a dictionary and cutting out all unnecessary words to come up with this. Powerful write in brevity.
Thank you so much Walt =)
A vividly alive poem!
Thanks so much!
A tinge of sadness but very nicely done. The child’s hand makes it even more poignant
Thank you very much Suzy