I want to bury myself inside of you
Inside the polyurethane chambers of
Your heart, the acquired shell of a
Salt-fearing mollusk, your love
Reinforces me, galvanizes my
Mindstates, I want to know the
Truth of your being, to press my
Untasted smile to your surrendering
Mouth, to assemble your syllables
Into a life raft underneath my tongue
So that I may speak only of art
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You desire me despite the absences that
Withdraw, despite the decay muting my
Bones, I am silent but for the shudder of
Your breath, you who are my language, my
Alchemy, my reason for earthly habitation
Despite my martian ideologies, I am
Beautiful because you have held me and
Rendered me so, that is your virtuosity
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(Eeeep I tried to write something romantic, there is probably a law against that somewhere lol)
mindlovemisery 
Great job… 🙂
If I may (as a reader), I must put forth my opinion that I think heavy-syllable words sometimes take away the charm of romantic poems.. words like polyurethane, though, have a specific meaning in the creation but when read, it is a little distracting from losing yourself in the emotions of the poem.
I am just being honest. I hope you won’t mind. 🙂
I understand totally I just like the concept in this case. I love words so much I sometimes get carried away lol
i love your words… and the meaning they convey.. have to open up my dictionary a lot many times.. 🙂
Thank you I always have my dictionary up I am always leaning new words from other writers
This is how I usualy end up writing about romance as well, or even worse I swim into all the worlds cliches mixed with icecream and roses 🙂
I liked your words choice, the only thing I could say as a critique is that the formating made it a little bit hard to read this time, the emotion was not as strongly felt as it could be with different word positioning. It is still an awesome poem 😀
Well I see one problem wordpress does this bizarre thing to my posts sometimes buggers up the formatting but in truth I know nothing about presentation
WP sucks regarding formating, I never write directly here. I use Notepad, then copy is and post, then I Edit the details like color, bold/italic lettering and similar.
Your presentation is great, it gives a feeling of something like breathing, its an inhale-exhale kind of format, at least that is how I see it. Just thought a slightly diff positioning in this poem would give it more strenght then it allready has (and would relieve a little bit the tension your words create maybe,like mentioned in prev comments :D)
It really does, I think you will have to show me because my brain has not woken up this morning lol
press my
Untasted smile to your surrendering
Mouth, to assemble your syllables
Into a life raft underneath my tongue
So that I may speak only of art
wow, love those lines….really creative…i am beautiful because you held me is another wonderful line…ha…you got the romantic part down…smiles…
Awww thank you Brian my romantic side is so shy lol
OK….. you had me at the first line…. “I want to bury myself inside of you.” Talk about a HOOK! Wonderful wonderful poem. I really like it. You are a true wordsmith. Kudos!
Awww thank you Ray wow!
Hard and slick, this urethane heart. Nothing sticks, but slips beyond reach of my inability to respond!. So Graphic! Wonderful!
Thank you so much Scott =)
Too many gorgeous images here to quote — so lovely!!!
Awwww thanks Marya =)
🙂
Beautiful….totally worth the cops showing up at your door. I’ll come on visiting days!! 😀
lol awww thank you that is so sweet
😀
Amazing write…….hudos!
Oh thank you so much =)
Beautifully done!! 🙂 🙂
Thank you so much Helen =)
Like howanxious, I always open Google Translate when reading your poems haha. But I don’t think your unusual (only for me, maybe) words take away the charm. Quite the contrary, every time I find out the meanings, I think: how did these words occur to you? You know English is not my first language, but that’s not the problem. The words you choose wouldn’t occur to me in any languages.
People sometimes think I have a huge vocabulary but it is really just that the words I know are rather unusual lol. I am extremely selective in my word choices but I am not sure how my vocabulary turned out so strange maybe because I am strange
Well, you need to be ‘strange’, to have your own ‘colors’, to be brilliant. My friends and family always say I’m strange. I think I’ve got to read and talk to you more so I’ll become stranger lol
LOL I have been known to bring out that aspect of people
Love your word choices…
“Your heart, the acquired shell of a
Salt-fearing mollusk”
and
“to assemble your syllables”
Awww thank you Melanie =)
no laws on the earth to control your feelings 🙂
There really aren’t thankfully lol
but i enjoyed it 🙂 assuming the omitted parts 🙂
hehe =)