Doll
Your misshapen fingers slide apart
My ribs search the whispering pulse
For philosophies unkept
Invasive, your desire
To vilify me
To remake me
Beautiful
Silent
Yours
=
Starve
His rubber tongue wraps around her throat
A language of gross distortions
Of post-coital promises
Sensible to no one
Except the dreamer
She wants for love
He wants sex
Both hearts
Starve
mindlovemisery 
I like both. Starve though is my favorite of the two. It is so powerful and poignant. )
Thank you so much!
Wow, both are great, the second one in particular describes a common and heartbreaking, soul breaking aspect of many relationships!! 🙂 🙂
Awwww thanks Helen I liked the 2nd one better myself
ouch…both hearts starve…neither being fulfilled…
the remaking into beautiful and silent, is rather scary…when compliance is the goal…
Thank you Brian it is and you certainly caught the message! Sharp as ever
I was not familiar with this form. Nice. Will have to try it!
Please do Karin I would love to see =)
Sensible only to the dreamer- nice. I’m not familiar with the form but it has an attractive, descending/fading appearance that pleases the eye, You worked these very well.
Thank you very much Scott =)
The style (I don’t know what it’s called) and the words combine to bring the reader down to the level where life is lived word over word over word.
Thank you!