Her hair,
Murder of crows
In hysteria tossed
Like the smoke of extinguished stars
Falling in funereal succession.
Her lips slide against my appeals
Like velvet eclipsing
My hands arrest
Her hair
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mindlovemisery 
THIS … is a mighty fine rictameter! Beautiful.
Thank you Helen its my second one ever I really like this form!
That has to include two of my favourite ever introductory lines to a poem…her hair, murder of crows…amazing, how do you think of these things??? 🙂
Thank you so much Helen, if I told you that I’d have to kill you lol I really don’t know I think I am just very abstract in my thinking. You are supremely creative Helen =)
And you, my dear, are just brilliant and totally unique! 🙂
awww thank you so sweet
This was amazing to read, thank you!
Thank you so much for reading it =)
Like how you equate this image with her hair…well penned!
Hugs
SueAnn
Thank SueAnn =)
Lovely…!
Thank you Annell =)
The smoke image really got me in there….you are a past master at constructing portals i think…tomorow im sure i willl see a crow, thats how these things go, and thanks… It will be still up to me to work out what the hell it means ..i love this power that good art has, to inspire.
Oh wow thank you so much!
Oh, dark and sexy rictameter! Love the line, “Her lips slide against my appeals”
Thank you so much!
yw – it’s really good
eloquent…absolutely lovely.
Thanks Kathe =)
What a tantalising glimpse of a supreme seductress.
Thanks Janice =)
Beautiful passion, indeed..lovely…
Thank you Lyn =)
I like this very much, the intriguing layering from of words and phrases offering alternative connections.
Thank you Dave =)
Lovely write. 🙂
Thanks =)
Sensually beautiful 🙂
Thank you so much =)
You know? When you have a poetic form that demands such attention to syllables, the finished product can sometimes seem so contrived … you have done this form proud by making the scene you create work with the form effortlessly! Well done!
awwww thank you so much Susan that means a lot to me!
Wonderfully crafted. A dark read in shapely format – makes the poem more alluring!
Thank you Helena =)
Wow…so full of passion…marvelous piece!!
Thank you Susie =)
WOW! Very sensual.
Thank you very much Donna =)
“Her hair,
Murder of crows”
Wow, from those best-ever opening lines you crafted the most marvelous poem. Those opening lines could also set up a play, a novel, a movie…..hell, even a symphony!
Oh wow Lydia thank you so much!
Excellent…
Awwww thanks Tess =)