Beneath the imprints
Of your cigarette
The black rings
Of exhausted fires.
These scars of the flesh
Don’t penetrate as deep
As your betrayal
*
The noxious smell of smoke
Leaves my thoughts
Jumbled and contentious
I set my jaw
Still the tears come
Over raw, stippled cheeks
Bitter as the ashes
Of my naked trust
*
I catch your sick grin
Beneath heavy lashes
I bite off curses
My paltry voice
Shocking in rage
Defiant,
Strait though the filter
*
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Raw and a great deal of emotion put into it.
Sometimes so difficult to let go of the hurt. But, it is, in the end, which brings healing to us.
Thank you very much. I agree we have to let go to heal. I choose to write about this painful events because there are others still suffering and its also cathartic
raw and powerful…thank your for sharing. It takes courage to share your pain, bravo to you 🙂
Thank you so much for your lovely compliments
“These scars of the flesh
Don’t penetrate as deep as your betrayal” AND
“I clench my jaw
Still the tears come
Over raw, stippled cheeks
Bitter as the ashes
Of my naked trust”
It doesn’t need to clarify your pain when the poem says it all.
Very nice. 🙂
Conveying emotion is the most important part of writing to me so thank you so much =) I am glad you enjoyed
Writing is most soothing for such memories. Deep, lingering poem. 🙂
Thank you for the like and for your lovely words =)
Oh, ouch. This poem is proof that sometimes that which hurts us most can serve as a catalyst for poetry that touches deeply the human spirit.
Thank you so much, I am glad that it touched you
wow!!!
this is a strong write…. i liked it
I am so glad you liked it, thank you
Through a smoky haze, I hear these words being read–a forlorn saxophone echoing somewhere in the night.
oh nice vision!
This is an amazing write! Love it!
Bullying Poems
I am so glad you liked it!
First off thank you for sharing what must be a diffcult experiance to express. Second sorry you had to put with that during your childhood. Thirdly the way you expressed such a powerful emotion was nothing less than insparational and done so in a way I have seen none better. Fourthly I wasnt sure what was your post for the potluck thingly so I hope this is it. Fifthly a personal thank you to you from me for you comment on my Drowning A Poet poem. I feel you fully understood what I tried to convay and for that I am deeply apperchiative, i wrote a response to it on my website if you care to check that out, Also I have subscribed to your blog and if you ever need help with, writing, poetic rivalery, or anything of the sort, I would be more than happy to lend me ear. Have a great life and good luck
Though it was painful its hard to wish for another life since I can’t imagine being anyone else then who I am, no matter how imperfect. I guess I’ve kind of accepted myself, at least somewhat 😛 Thank you so much =) I have a hard time with flow if you have tips for that and I have no style
Think of the salables per line and try to match like this, 16,12,16,12 or something so that the number of salables repeats throughout the piece that should help with flow on free verse 😛
Wow! What a powerful poem!
Thank you dear =)
Thanks for sharing your hardship. It could help others come to terms with difficult situations.
I hope so and thank you so much for visiting
powerful pungent sorrow … beautifully crafted … loved visiting your blog.
I love having you =) Thank you so much
raw, powerful, …. beautifully crafted …
Thank you for your lovely words and your visit
A really good poem. It’s just a shame the circumstance! It’s so hard to believe that such a cruelty is possible! And I’m thinking about the children on the eve of their day…
I can’t imagine doing that too a child either. I have my own daughter and its just unimaginable I hope she never goes through what I did growing up
A very intense word play! Well done.. 🙂
xox
Thank you so much I am glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the like
i could feel it…!
I am glad that my poem reached you, thank you
Adjectives fail to tell you how your poem touched me. I work with abused children and see these realities daily. Sharing as you have done is so generous of you and will help bring attention to the plight of thousands of children. I keep you in Light and Love. Hugs, pat
*hugs back* What an amazing person you are, I wish growing up I had someone there for me like you. Thank you so much for your lovely comments
tough, gritty, compelling and excellent in many places. Than you for sharing this
Luke
Thank you so much =) And thanks for the like!
beautiful and awesome…i love the way you write……this poem spoke so much and beautiful use of three words…..
now let me know hoe to follow you
There’s a subscribe button at the very top on a tool bar for all members of wordpress. Thank you so much! I am so glad you enjoyed it =)
I will try that not in this poem perhaps but another =)