Fear is an anvil
That fashions
Of vulnerability a carapace
In these fierce designs
Anger festers as contempt
With oil slicks
Of cancerous blood
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Obscured by darkness
My vision
Can see only deception
A future cast
In the decapitated shadows
Of regret
I ache before
I can be undone
In your malicious hands
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These brimstone kisses
Flowers of the forge
Scalding on assembly
These relics of affection
Backhanded rage
Screaming on delivery
*
All our memories
Have become malignant.
In each other’s eyes
We are cruel
Capable of any atrocity
And what we accuse
Is far more vicious
Than any placement
Of furrowed hands
Very potent these words… once you’ve been in a toxic relationship it takes a long time to trust again. Very dark place in these words it certainly has an impact.
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Wow, this is thought provokingly awesome!
Thank you so much!
Hey Babe! This is about (IMO!) two Peeps who would do well to remember that it is in GIVING that we RECEIVE. And that gift is L O V E !!!! Is there a way to, like–start OVER?
Or is this just a ‘poem’ with no reference to “certain” Peeps?
Either way, a GOOD write. Thank you. And thanks also for stopping by my place!
PEACE!
I am a fatal optimist when it comes to love and only love really. I think love is inherent with risks and you have to surrender yourself to it and be willing to take those risks. Starting over to me would be first distinguishing yourself from the relationship and the other person you’ve become deeply entrenched with, you know figuring out your individual identity and truth. A lot of people place their personal happiness on other people and that’s a tremendous responsibility. No one can make you happy or fill you up, you have to take responsibility for yourself and your own health. Next I think its admitting to yourself how you’ve contributed or exacerbated the situation (its almost never a one person thing unless in matters of abuse especially with children), since you can’t change anyone but yourself you work on yourself. Just listening to the other person with sincere intent works wonders I think. If the other person does continue to be a detrimental part of your life I think you have to let go for your own well-being and move on.
Many strong images in these pieces. I especially like
anger festering in “oil slicks of cancerous blood,” “brimstone kisses,” and “backhanded rage.” and I hope this relationship is history for you!
Thank you so much for your wonderful compliments! And don’t worry I am not now in such a terrible state.
Who knew irises could look so menacing? But it’s time to switch on the light, I think, and see them for the colourful beauties they are! Let love, light and healing in…
=) Thanks for reading and commenting
beautiful poem … let love be our strength, our power and hope.
Thank you so much for your words and for visiting my site =)
“Love, is a many splended thing, love lifts up where we belong, All we need is love”
“The greatest thing, U’ll ever learn, is just to love, and be loved in return” Moulon Rouge, for both qoutes.
a good part of my depression catagory on my blog is about love loss and i have been there a couple of times, it just best to keep your head held high my friend. Fuck em they apperently were not worth you time. There will be a person out there who will love you for you i promise you just got to find them.
I am writing about the past fortunately. Thank you for your inspiring words though and for visiting my site =) I hope your life is filled with love as well!
I hurt before I can be
Love this line…. Great job on this 🙂
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Strong and hard hitting! Glad things have moved on since, but you’re spot on with the past feeling!
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very hard hitting……i wonder if it is the love that creates the fear…….its beautiful!!
I imagine it is. Thank you so much for visiting and commenting =)
Very potent words, the imagery is just amazing. Loved the use of metaphors to make your meanings crystal. Brilliant poem.
The Lonely Recluse.
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Hi, this seems as if it was a very toxic and heart-breaking relationship. You’ve captured the rawness of the wounds so well. I’m glad this is in your past now. strange how we poets can write from our deepest feelings of love or sorrow, so eloquently.
Thank you so much for your beautiful words =)
Excellent writing. Thank you for sharing!
Thank you so much for visiting and for your compliments =)
What a choice of words! Excellent!
-poetryroad
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When we’re in love, we sometimes can’t avoid fighting with each other. Nice imagery!
Indeed! Its hard being that close to another person and not stepping on each other’s feet sometimes. Thank you so much for visiting =)
I especially like the 4 stanza, and the way it ends
Thank you so much. I really enjoy when people are specific. Thank you so much for visiting my site =)
the last stanza “ouch” yet so true…how love can sour so badly indeed! 😦
Enjoy the rally!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/05/21/in-the-land-of-pretense/
Great job with your rally submissions! Thank you so much
A strongly worded poem with startling imagery showing the other faces of life-anger, fear and decepton.
“This affection, nothing but
Backhanded rage”- a simmering poem indeed!
Wow thank you so much!
I enjoyed the battle with holding back, and channeling the anger
http://mrblaque78.wordpress.com/2011/05/22/alone-with-selfish-demons-4/
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The two words that come to mind after reading this are intense and bold! Your writing depicts what many people are afraid to open themselves up to = honesty. I’m glad you’ve shared this with all of us. But more importantly I’m glad I read it! You have a unique writing style that will keep me coming back. Keep it up!
Oh wow thank you so much! You have totally made my day with your lovely compliments =)
The words paint capturing imagery. So lovely and well-expressed.
Ms. Queenly
Thank you very much
this poem absoulutly just blew me away!
wow the power just exploded off the screen!
Thank you so much! You are very kind. *hugs*
The last stanza summed up my relationship with my ex-fiancé perfectly. Looking at your musical and reading tastes, it seems we have a lot in common. Keep writing, you have a talent 🙂
Sounds like a painful situation, its awful when relationship go in that direction. Yeah? Usually people don’t say that to me so I am intrigued! Thank you so much for visiting
Very powerful. The imagery…is really great.
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This is dark and beautiful. You capture the emotion of “bad” unhealthy relationships well.
Thank you so much =) I am glad you liked it!
I can feel the emotion, the depth of this poem. Nice work.
http://robinelizabeth58.wordpress.com/2011/05/25/to-you/
Thank you so much for your lovely words
This is so graphic and reveals the negative spiral in the static space of emotional pain. A really incredible piece! I read it this morning! It is now 4:41 PM on Friday…. What you wrote, I’ve been there and when I read it I didn’t want to stay with it because the joy past a painful experience (s) is so possible!
But in an aesthetically literary way this is an incredible piece. Thanks for sharing it! Cindy
Thank you very much =) I know the joy certainly of love as well, I am actually optimistic in that department despite my writing lol. Writing about pain doesn’t mean I am necessarily going through it at the moment or that I have ever experienced what I am describing (I write through characters too).
deep thinking, vivid piece of emotional distress 🙂
Thank you so much and thanks for reading =)
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This IS genius! loved especially il slicks Of cancerous blood…oh yes, this is brilliant, Yves!!
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Oh wow thank you!
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“Ya know, I don’t mind the hat, but these heels are killin’ me.”
They do look seriously painful
Very powerful and deep!
Thanks Celestine