When you went away
I stowed you in a box
Our moments compressed
In a stack of love letters
And caress-worn photographs
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(My first attempt at a Tanka. The syllable count is 5-7-5-7-7)
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mindlovemisery 
I’ve not heard of this form. Thanks, it’s good.
I have been studying new forms and I really like this one. I’d be very interested to see a poem you created in this form. You are an incredible writer =)
Good one! I enjoy that form too. I sometimes start with haiku and then realize I need more syllables to complete my thought and end up with tanka. (I think it’s tanka and not tanko, unless there are two ways to spell it.)
No you are right I misspelled it thanks for letting me know lol I like this form a lot too. Thank you for all your lovely comments.
inspiring one, well done.
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Thank you jingle =)
A very vivid image captured in a few words – I like!
I am glad you liked it =)
I think you did an excellent tanka form and the flow of the words created a fantastic snapshot in my head~
Thank you so much I am glad you think so =)
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You always manage to take classic forms and create them as something completely unique, original, your own!! 🙂 🙂
Thank you Helen you are so kind =)
Lovely tanka really very clear image and great photos!
Thank you very much and for the reblog as well =)
Welcome! My pleasure.
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Have a look at this great Tanka done by Mindlovemisery!
I don’t know anything about forms but that’s a great poem
Thanks Richard!
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Lovely Yves, you have captured it very well.
Thank you very much Michael =)
Lovely, all aspects.
Thank you very much =)
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I enjoyed this and loved the images it creates. Wonderful my friend. I think you can take on any form with grace and make it wonderful.
Not any form there are some lyrical rhyming forms that are beyond me, I cannot understand iambic pentameter at all lol Thank you so much Anja (hugs)
ewwww I remember studying iambic pentameter…..then again I do not like rules. 🙂
You are welcome!! Many hugs back
I don’t either I didn’t stick the forms at all in my older work haha
I am trying a bit more but….lol
I am trying now myself it is never easy lol
Love it! Tanka, shadorma, so many forms out there to try! There was a fabulous poet from Memoirsofadragon who wrote such inspiring poetry forms. He has gone inactive but his blog is still there and still amazing. I go now and then to be re-inspired as he encouraged me to try my first form.
I would love to see yours =) I find Tanka easier to work with then Shadorma. I have a few more Shadorma but it’s a tough form
LOL my forms or my form? I am not in your poetry league by any stretch of the imagination. You inspire me more than anyone these days and I think are my favorite poetry blog!
Oh wow that is a tremendous comment I don’t even know what to say but I am blushing!
lovely nostalgia 🙂
Thanks Melanie!
Perfect!
Thank you Celestine =)
Beautiful
Thank you Kev =)
That was sad and lovely at the same time.
Sometimes I write fictional work that makes me cry
Very well done tanka!
Thanks Sara =)